Ah – not only did the lovely
Chthonia pick up my humble short piece
Remuneration and did a beta on it, she also tackled the challenge I failed with – to make it into a drabble.
Which made me realise that I probably fail at drabbling because I'm too attached to certain ideas/images/phrases to prune them properly – it's so much easier to inflate them instead of cutting back.
So for anyone who's interested in the art of drabble-cutting, here goes:
First try – attempting to keep what I saw as the major plot points and most of the imagery that really stood out for me.( 220 words )Second try – pruning the text but still trying to keep plot and imagery( 154 words )(I guess it’s necessary to cut either some plot or some characteristion/imagery now)
So…( 100 words! Yay! )I really can't thank her enough - cutting down drabbles takes a lot more time than writing them.
*hugs*
And I've borrowed a couple of simmered-down phrases for the full story as well.
*hugs again*