This was the perfect read for the afternoon before HBP. Lol, I seem to have been reading nothing but non-con today!
Anyway, I loved how you wrote this in Harry's POV and in the present tense, as if to anchor us right there in the moment with him, as the events unfold. A blow-by-blow account, if you will!
Also, I have to say that your imagery is brilliant. Some funny: It feels like he's doing pull-ups in hell. Some thrilling Lucius hisses. "It was a pleasure having you, and although you will not remember this night, I promise that you'll never forget me." And alot downright sexy! Harry fishes for a cutting retort, but something in Lucius' face makes him shiver. An alarming sincerity – as if he already knows Harry will break, and even mourns the fact a little.
The description of the effect of the rape on Harry was good too. Lucius effectively destroyed him with a simple 'swish and flick'
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Date: 2005-07-15 03:47 pm (UTC)Anyway, I loved how you wrote this in Harry's POV and in the present tense, as if to anchor us right there in the moment with him, as the events unfold. A blow-by-blow account, if you will!
Also, I have to say that your imagery is brilliant. Some funny: It feels like he's doing pull-ups in hell.
Some thrilling Lucius hisses. "It was a pleasure having you, and although you will not remember this night, I promise that you'll never forget me."
And alot downright sexy! Harry fishes for a cutting retort, but something in Lucius' face makes him shiver. An alarming sincerity – as if he already knows Harry will break, and even mourns the fact a little.
The description of the effect of the rape on Harry was good too. Lucius effectively destroyed him with a simple 'swish and flick'